Yep, I will be on Alex J. Cavanaugh's blog this Sunday, August 15 (oops, make that Tuesday, August 17). Just a lil' intro post on my writing journey to date. If you haven't been by his blog, make the trip because it's awesomesauce fer sure. I love sci-fi and can't wait to read his newly published book, CassaStar.
While I'm on here, I also want to publicly congratulate Matthew Rush at The Quintessentially Questionable Query Experiment for winning a major-cool query contest at WriteOnCon. Here's to you getting your stuff out there. *raises drink to you--cough, cough, it's a lil' strong*
For those of you who may have missed WriteOnCon, it was truly amazing. Lots of great stuff. I didn't really get to participate much since I was underway for almost all of it, but I'm still planning on going over the posts now that I'm back in San Dog. Well, also I don't write YA/MG/PB, but what I've read was educational anyway.
If you're interested in attending an online writer's convention, a different one is scheduled for October, but registration is ending very soon for The Muse Online Writer's Conference. Check out my sidebar to get more information.
One more thing: Happy Friday the 13th!
Friday, August 13
Tuesday, August 10
Ways to organize (or maybe to waste your time).
After a crazy weekend of blogfesting my brains out (and no, I’m still not done reading some of the posts), I’m eager to get roaring on my current WIP so I can get around to finishing the biggest edit ever on my first MS. Yes, I have some great ideas to get myself in a happy place with it. Finally—whew!!
My second WIP seems to be in better shape than my first and I think it may be that I actually incorporated a little—and I mean teensie—bit of outlining this time. The story arc and character arcs are all improved. Now that I’ve worked out this method of plottsing (or is it pantsotting? It all sounds weird.), I know how I want to edit my first MS.
I noticed a few blog posts from writers who were having some trouble finding a system for outlining or organizing their scenes, and though I’m a big fan of the old bullet list, I don’t think anyone else is all that enthusiastic about it. So I thought I’d look at some creative writing tools to try out.
I found plenty of programs to choose from. The most pricey was Dramatica Pro at $200-$220. From what I read, this software could just about write the story—well, if you can figure out how to use it. It asks you about a few hundred questions and then maps out the story for you down to the bitty details. It has just about every feature available in a writing software program including structure templates, brainstorming tools, outlines, reports, conflict, plot and character development tools, and a built-in word processor. I thought I’d laugh when I read it has no spell check or word count capability. Sounds like some geeky engineer student oversight to me.
If you want to save a bit, but still keep most of the features, Power Structure has just about all the same features at $149.95 except it’s reportedly a lot more difficult to use. It doesn’t come with tutorials so you’re on your own with it.
If you want to save even more, $29-$99 or so will buy you WriteWay, Power Writer, or StoryWeaver. These programs give you nearly the same number of features as the other two programs, but for under $100, although the features lean more to the word processing side than to the story development side. They’re also easier to use for the less experienced writers (like me!) as well. On the down side, the first two programs don’t work with Mac. For Mac, Scrivener looks pretty darn good and at such a low price.
If you’re anything like me and flock to anything that’s free, you could try an open source program. I’ve found a couple with some good reviews. Storybook can help with structuring your book with tools to manage chapters, scenes, characters and locations. It offers several different views of your work and instantly saves data as it’s entered. You can also export in a variety of formats, txt, pdf, html, rtf, etc. yWriter is another one developed by a writer and earning positive remarks. Rough Draft is no longer being updated, but the software is still available for download. I personally have Celtx, an open source screenwriting program that allows storyboards, etc., but all I ever do with that is play around with it.
The basic thought behind these programs is that a simple word-processing program is inadequate for longer pieces of fiction and stories with complex plots or characters. After looking at a bunch of the screenshots, I can see how some of the views might be beneficial, but I’m at my best when working simplistically, often with just a pen and paper. Maybe I haven’t found the right program for me yet.
How about you? Do you have a favorite program you use or do you just prefer a basic word-processing program like Word? Or is it pen and paper, too? What’s in your writer’s toolbox?
Saturday, August 7
It's high time for some High Drama Blogfest...
What an awesome idea for a blogfest! Thank you to DL Hammons for hosting. Please visit Cruising Altitude for our other blogger-friends and check out their dramatic entries.I had a difficult time choosing a scene. I suppose I chose this because it reminded me of a soap opera, and if anything is high drama, it's a darn soap opera.
Like yesterday's blogfest post, it's from my new WIP, The Paladin. It's a bit longish, but reads quickly because of all the dialogue. Please be gentle as my entire WIP is in infancy and has been written over the last two weeks. Thus it's an unedited, very first rough draft.
Rainee rounded a corner not too far from her suite when she saw Tom. He stood an inch or two away from a tall, voluptuous blonde, leaning toward her and speaking urgently against her ear. The woman’s hands rubbed up and down his upper arms.
Her immaculate, label-heavy apparel and glamorous hair and makeup pegged her as a socialite. Even the shoes she wore cost more than the average person made in a month or two. Not one to avoid conflict, Rainee ditched her limp as best she could and approached the couple.
“Hello, Tom. Amber.”
“Oh!” The blonde startled at Rainee’s sudden appearance at her side. “Rainee, I didn’t know you were out of the med ward yet.”
“I never went to a med ward, Sis.” Rainee knew her sister hated being called anything but her own name. “Nice of you to come and visit your wounded sister, though.”
“Now Rainee, you know how busy it is at the office, and I’ve been in committee meetings the last two days. It’s very hard work. Isn’t that why you left the business?”
“Yes, of course. It must be tough fitting in the salon visit every other day. What brings you to Aurora, Amber? Didn’t you say this settlement was the ghetto?”
“I’m sure you’ve heard about the shipping transport losses recently. We met with the Security Director and the Council to find a solution to the security issues within the shipping lines.” So that’s where Dan and Emma were this afternoon. “Tom was amazing with his insight and support. I feel confident he can get us what we need to continue operations in the area.” Rainee could almost hear the purr in Amber’s voice. The woman kept a hand possessively on Tom’s arm.
“Sounds like all’s well in the land of movers and shakers.” Despite her gentile, upper-class upbringing, Rainee wanted to punch Amber in the face. Instead, she smiled politely and patted her sister’s cheek with her left hand.
“What is that?” she gasped, grabbing Rainee’s hand to examine the exquisite dihydra diamond. “I’ve never seen one of these in person. How’d you get this?”
“If you’d find a moment to answer my comms you’d know Tom and I have been dating for several months. He’s asked me to marry him, and I said yes.” Rainee bathed Tom in a radiant smile as she looped her arm through his. He’d been silently watching the terse exchange between the sisters, but when she turned the full force of that smile on him, he virtually melted.
“I’ve been working up the nerve to ask her for weeks,” he said. Inadvertently brushing away Amber’s hand, he bent his head to kiss Rainee. Her sister’s eyes narrowed, though she pasted on a delighted smile.
“How wonderful! Father will be happy to hear of it,” she said. Rainee noticed Amber’s sharp fingernails dig into the palms of her hands. “When is the wedding to take place?”
“Well, our engagement is new. I’m arranging an engagement party which you’re welcome to attend. The invitations will be sent soon. I think we’ll be announcing the wedding date at the party.” He looked at Rainee.
“Yes, that sounds good,” she answered the question in his eyes.
“I suppose I should not hold you up any longer, Councilman. I look forward to hearing your final plan for security on the transports. I’ll be in touch with you soon.” Amber nodded curtly to him and made her exit without another word to her sister. Rainee waited until she was out of view before she turned on Tom, jerking her arm from his. He’d had a strange look on his face as he watched after Amber’s departure.
“What the hell were you doing with that viper?” He almost cringed at her harsh tone.
“I didn’t know she was your sister. You never talk about your family.”
“It doesn’t matter if she’s my sister or not. She was all over you, and you let her. Why were you whispering in her ear?” His face flushed slightly.
“She wasn’t all over me. We were just talking, and I wasn’t raised to be rude to a lady. They’re having problems with their supply transports, and I’m trying to work out some way to minimize the losses. We actually have been in meetings the last two days. Like it or not, we’ve been working together and we’ll continue to work together until the problem is solved. It’s my job, Baby.”
“I don’t like it, and that harpy is no lady. Whatever you do, don’t make that mistake. You’re too damn nice for your own good sometimes, Tom. She will chew you up and spit you out before you know she’s taken the first bite.”
“Were you jealous?” he asked quietly. Her jaw dropped.
“Jealous? Of her? No. Not really. You could have been just anybody she was hanging all over, and I’d be angry. She’s a beauty on the outside, but never forget she’s really a troll. And now that she knows we’re engaged, she’ll try digging her claws into you.”
“That’s an awful thing to say about your sister.”
“It would be if it wasn’t the truth. I know her, Tom. Trust me.”
“I do. I just think maybe you should give her a chance.”
“I’ve given her plenty. When is it enough?”
“It’s never enough when it comes to family.”
“Once we’re married, she’ll be your family, and you can give her all the chances you want.”
Yep. I did warn you it was longish, but I promise to make it up by reading all of yours ;) On another note, I hope you take a moment to check out the "Help find a cure" platform contest in my sidebar. It'd be awesome if the blogosphere can spread the word for a good cause, if only by posting the link.
Friday, August 6
Change Blogfest is here!
Many thanks to Elizabeth for today's blogfest! I love blogfests, and it'll be even more fun because this time I get to actually visit everyone's posts this time. My entry today from my second WIP, The Paladin, takes the change literally. My MCs, Rainee and Sen, survived a crash and took shelter for the night. Sen has developed a strong attraction to Rainee and felt urges he didn't know what to do with. As an alien Kindred born without the ability to bond with a lifemate, he's not supposed to have these feelings, but Rainee indulged them, unable to control her own attraction to him and unaware of the consequences. Afterward, a frightening transformation began that would end life as he knew it. This scene occurs a few days after the beginning.
Sen lay motionless along his bed, but his insides churned. He stared at the ceiling overhead without really seeing. The pain of his transformation had been like nothing he’d ever suffered, but then this pain that followed… Some days he didn’t want to live anymore.
He’d never known what it was to be alone. There were always the others. Always. Knowing their unity would never be his again hammered at him over and over, his soul caught in the abyss of aching loneliness that walked in his Kindred’s empty footsteps. The uncertainty of what he was becoming, facing it in isolation, sharpened his fear.
He was no longer Paladin. That much was clear, and it wasn’t just his eyes and his change to full adulthood. He’d thought Rai would be afraid or disgusted when she saw how his eyes had changed. Instead, she’d been surprised and then accepted it just as quickly. If only he could. It set him apart, removed him even further from his Paladin brethren than he already was.
Stress tightened his stomach into a great burden balled up in the center of him. What the hell was he now? What had he become? He had no Kindred but Gabe, and even Gabe no longer connected with him once the transformation was complete. But Sen understood that. Gabe was an elder of honor and loyal to Kindred decree. He would do what he could to help, the most he could get away with, but he had his limits.
Time had passed as slowly as Sen’s adjustment to the changes inside of him. His senses and his reflexes had grown more acute. He didn’t know his own strength anymore, and his body radiated a vast energy that didn’t have a place to go. To those around him, his eyes were the easiest to notice, but what changed behind them confused even him.
None of this would be happening to him if he’d never been dispensed to the humans. Argent knew how he felt about them and sent him anyway. He’d hated them down to the smallest part of his being. And now he had even more reason to. It didn’t matter to him that Rai wasn’t to blame for his transformation after all. If he hadn’t been in Aurora, if he hadn’t been on Team Seven, and if she hadn’t been so… Rai.
Today she’d prepared for battle and though they hadn’t gone out on a hunt after all, he didn’t let her down. He’d made her cry. She’d been so silent, too. But his senses were even more amplified now, and he heard it in the way she drew each breath. It should have been satisfying. His vengeful nature should have danced with each blow he delivered. It changed nothing.
Poor Sen isn't handling the change very well, and he's taking it out on Rainee. Hope you enjoyed, even if it's not your genre, and thank you for reading!
Poor Sen isn't handling the change very well, and he's taking it out on Rainee. Hope you enjoyed, even if it's not your genre, and thank you for reading!
Saturday, July 31
Making up for lost time
A while back I was gifted with some Versatile Blogger Awards, but since I fell off the face of the earth just before receiving these, I have yet to pass them on. It gives me great warm fuzzies to know others follow my blog and find it worth their time, and I appreciate that enormously.
There are so many great informative and imaginative blogs out there and following so many can be time-consuming. That's why I am happy to pass this award onward to other bloggy friends who make the reading worth my time.
1. Thank and link back to the person who bestowed upon you the wonderful award:
Great big fluffy thank you to Bryan at the Time Guardian Blog. I can't wait until your books get picked up because I'm looking forward to reading them. They sound like exactly what my kids would love to read.
L'Aussie at L'Aussie Writing, I love the imagery in your writing. Thank you for all your input and for following my blog.
Thank you also to OfficeGirl at Tired but Writing. We have quite a lot in common. It's almost scary sometimes to read your posts ;) Make sure you tell us all about your upcoming writer's conference. I haven't gone to one yet because I'm too darn poor for conferences, associations, contests, etc. Some day it's going to be all that's on my Christmas list, and then someone (*ahem*--hubby) will have to pay for one.
2. Share seven interesting or amusing things about yourself.
Hmmmm. Tough one. Feels funny to tag myself as interesting or amusing, but here's my best...
1) I foresee the cause of my death to be dark chocolate overdose, most likely Lindt or Lindor truffles. Should I just sue them now?
2) I love creepie/crawlies. I had to adopt out Pebbles, my Red-Tailed Columbian Boa when I left for boot camp because my husband couldn't stand to feed it the rats. My dream pet: a Monitor lizard.
3) I lived in a nudist colony for a very short period of time when I was a child.
4) I was groped twice at The Hobbit House, a restaurant/bar in Manila staffed entirely by little people. I guess my budonkadonk was too hard to resist at eye level.
5) I won a big, fat essay contest with a piece I wrote on washing a chicken. *make sure you use Woolite*
6) I've eaten locust, deep-fried. Tasted like chicken, but I couldn't stand the "hull" in the mouth afterward.
7) I can't let myself play RPG's. Nope, can't do it. I'll end up living at the computer, and not to blog or write, but to RPG the last half of my life away. Damn you, EQ (aka EvilQuest). You started all this!
2) I love creepie/crawlies. I had to adopt out Pebbles, my Red-Tailed Columbian Boa when I left for boot camp because my husband couldn't stand to feed it the rats. My dream pet: a Monitor lizard.
3) I lived in a nudist colony for a very short period of time when I was a child.
4) I was groped twice at The Hobbit House, a restaurant/bar in Manila staffed entirely by little people. I guess my budonkadonk was too hard to resist at eye level.
5) I won a big, fat essay contest with a piece I wrote on washing a chicken. *make sure you use Woolite*
6) I've eaten locust, deep-fried. Tasted like chicken, but I couldn't stand the "hull" in the mouth afterward.
7) I can't let myself play RPG's. Nope, can't do it. I'll end up living at the computer, and not to blog or write, but to RPG the last half of my life away. Damn you, EQ (aka EvilQuest). You started all this!
3. Pass the award top 15 bloggers you have just recently discovered and who you think are fantastic for any and all reasons!! I tried to choose blogs I follow which didn't appear to already have this award. Without further ado and in no particular order:
1) Matthew @ The Quintessentially Questionable Query Experiment
2) Jo @ Shoveling in a Jo Storm
3) Katie @ Creepy Query Girl
4) L.@ Spunk on a Stick
5) Stu @ Stusplace
6) Sara @ Sara B. Larson
7) Tina @ Sweet Niblets
8) Karen @ Eternal Moonshine of a Daydreaming Mind
9) Roni @ Fiction Groupie
10) Megan @ The Write Stuff
11) Shelli @ A*Musings
12) Julie @ Silver Lining
13) Tara @ Feel of Something New
14) Anne @ Piedmont Writer
15) Margie @ Spin Me Write Round
2) Jo @ Shoveling in a Jo Storm
3) Katie @ Creepy Query Girl
4) L.@ Spunk on a Stick
5) Stu @ Stusplace
6) Sara @ Sara B. Larson
7) Tina @ Sweet Niblets
8) Karen @ Eternal Moonshine of a Daydreaming Mind
9) Roni @ Fiction Groupie
10) Megan @ The Write Stuff
11) Shelli @ A*Musings
12) Julie @ Silver Lining
13) Tara @ Feel of Something New
14) Anne @ Piedmont Writer
15) Margie @ Spin Me Write Round
4. Contact the bloggers you picked to let them about the award so they may pass on the awsomesauce.
Please stop by and visit any of my bloggy buddies you haven't visited yet and check out their blogs!
Friday, July 23
Sometimes I LOVE my job!
This time out to sea brought my ship some redeeming factors. There's been a lot of rare evolutions, lots of missile shoots, some test platform activities, the sinking of a ship, and a movie filmed onboard. Wow. It's a lot to pack into a two-month underway, which is why we've been working so many hours each day. I was so excited about this, I thought I'd share it with you.
I actually hung out with and ate dinner with Alex Skarsgard (Eric on True Blood and Sgt. Colbert in Generation Kill) and with Peter Berg (credits too many to list). They were very laid-back, easygoing, and great to talk to.
I'm psyched to learn that Peter Berg's next project is "Lone Survivor," an account of one of the largest Special Ops disasters in US history. If you haven't read the book by Marcus Luttrell, I highly recommend it.
The rest of the film crew, Phil, Jimmy, Brett, etc., who stayed on board for several days filming some of our missile shoots were also very memorable guys. They didn't get irritated once with our questions and interest in their jobs.
So in 2012, the movie "Battleship" comes out featuring some shots from my ship, the USS Benfold. I'm looking forward to seeing my friends running around in the background as extras. I'm in some of the shots they took, but you can never be sure what scenes willl be cut. I suppose there's a chance I'll be in it as well. Woohoo! This makes movie #2 for me. My first ship, the USS Carl Vinson, was featured in the movie "Behind Enemy Lines." David Keith reenlisted me while he was on board. He signed my discharge papers, and Owen Wilson signed my reenlistment bonus check.
Also, our missile shoots were outrageously successful. At least you'll all be safe on our watch :)
In writerly news, my new WIP has raced up to over 18,000 words. I can't wait to get back so I can catch up on how everyone else is doing. Thanks for reading!
I actually hung out with and ate dinner with Alex Skarsgard (Eric on True Blood and Sgt. Colbert in Generation Kill) and with Peter Berg (credits too many to list). They were very laid-back, easygoing, and great to talk to.
I'm psyched to learn that Peter Berg's next project is "Lone Survivor," an account of one of the largest Special Ops disasters in US history. If you haven't read the book by Marcus Luttrell, I highly recommend it.
The rest of the film crew, Phil, Jimmy, Brett, etc., who stayed on board for several days filming some of our missile shoots were also very memorable guys. They didn't get irritated once with our questions and interest in their jobs.
So in 2012, the movie "Battleship" comes out featuring some shots from my ship, the USS Benfold. I'm looking forward to seeing my friends running around in the background as extras. I'm in some of the shots they took, but you can never be sure what scenes willl be cut. I suppose there's a chance I'll be in it as well. Woohoo! This makes movie #2 for me. My first ship, the USS Carl Vinson, was featured in the movie "Behind Enemy Lines." David Keith reenlisted me while he was on board. He signed my discharge papers, and Owen Wilson signed my reenlistment bonus check.
Also, our missile shoots were outrageously successful. At least you'll all be safe on our watch :)
In writerly news, my new WIP has raced up to over 18,000 words. I can't wait to get back so I can catch up on how everyone else is doing. Thanks for reading!
Sunday, July 18
Blogfest of DEATH!
First of all, I miss all of you Awesome Bloggers! I sincerely wish I could get to your blogs where I'm at, but it's impossible to view more than a couple of them. I have a difficult enough time loading just the Google search page. In fact, I'm now writing at 0330 after having been awake for over 26 hours. Yeah, fun. But on the bright side, I've had some really awesome experiences.
If you'd like to see where I'm at just Google "Rimpac 2010" or USS Benfold Rimpac or anything along those lines. I'll attempt to get a blog post in tomorrow as well with some crazy pics of our missile shoots. We had a film crew onboard, and you'll never guess who I got to hang out with all day! And yes, I'm sorry, but I'm leaving you hanging. I'm waiting to get pics in the right format to post. Anyway, without further ado...
I've been waiting for this Blogfest forever. Seriously. I cannot wait to read the entries for this one. Thank you Tessa for hosting this fantastic Deathapalooza. Please visit the other Blogfesters' links on Tessa's site.
My entry is from my first MS, The Elder, a paranormal romance with some sci-fi. Gabriel is an alien who has a keen interest in the MC, Emma. She's been away at Dayspring, a neighboring settlement, which is now under heavy attack by another race of aliens, the Vamphyri. In this scene, he heard her scream so he knows she's nearby, but he hasn't found her yet before he encounters a few of his enemies.
Gabriel crouched low underneath one of the long, open tinted-glass windows, closing his eyes to sharpen his other senses. He detected her scent, light and floral, and strained to hear her voice. She remained silent, spiking his desperate need to find her. Was she unconscious, lying somewhere in there bleeding to death? The thick stench of death blotted out any chance of finding her by a blood trail, and her scent lingered all over the room. He assumed her office had to be in this building.
Creeping to a shattered doorway at the side of the building, he listened for the Vamphyri's movements. He counted three in the immediate room with no detectable human life and another squad of undetermined quantity on some level above them, still fighting judging by the gunshots.
Waiting patiently, he entered as one of them walked unwary across the doorway. One brutal pass of his black carbon blade severed the creature’s spine and gouged its airway. A faint gust from its throat alerted the two remaining Vamphyri. He dropped its body carelessly to the ground as they moved toward him.
Frenzied screeches raked at his sensitive ears as they leaped at him, their movements blurry with speed. Gabriel dodged to meet one of them midair, twisting to bring it to the ground. He knew he had to dispatch this one right away. The creatures weren't exactly known for fair fights, and they could overpower him together if he wasn't careful. Grappling with the thing's arms, he used his knee to pin it down at the hips. His claws were useless restrained as they were. Instead, he worked at flipping the Vamphyr to its belly to get a constriction hold on it without getting his throat ripped out by its clashing fangs.
To his advantage, the vamp had been shot a few times, enough to slow the healing process down, and in its weakened state, he turned it, sliding one arm over it's left shoulder and the other arm under his right. He rolled, his opponent still trapped but struggling in his grip, to counter the second vamp's clawed attack. Gabriel grunted in pain as the claws caught the side of his right forearm, slicing it wide open, before gouging deeply into the restrained vamp. It shrieked again, piercing into his ears painfully. He squeezed tight, then tighter, breaking the blood flow, still keeping its body between him and the second one. Just a little more. Within a few seconds, he burst the monster's heart.
He dropped it to the floor, knowing he would have time to remove its head before it rose again. As long as he could take out the last Vamphyr. It screamed its fury at him, its needle teeth and half of its face dripping blood and gore, white lips drawn back almost to its jaw bones. Gabriel wondered at how he could be in any way related to this thing, an empty shell, nothing inside save base instinct.
With their eyes like black orbs, it was near impossible to tell which way a Vamphyr would move, unlike humans who give their intentions away so easily. Gabriel watched for the minute muscle movements that would eventually give the thing away, but finally tired of waiting, he sprang forward head on, then ducked down and to the side as the vamp moved to meet him. It tumbled over his legs, but immediately rolled into a defensive squat. Surprised, Gabriel rose to face his opponent, absolutely the fastest damn vamp he'd ever encountered.
Given no other choice, he reluctantly went in for a direct brute strength approach. He hoped that he was the stronger one of the two. At this point, he didn't have the time to waste on strategy while more Vamphyri lurked above him and Emma hid who knows where in the building among them, alone, terrified, and defenseless. His urgency to find her lent him an energy and power he hadn't felt since before he'd ever met the humans.
Gabriel roared in fiery rage as the two seized each other's arms, both pushing to keep the claws and fangs away from their throats. Minutes passed as their bodies tossed and tumbled in their struggle. As they neared the wall, the Vamphyr pushed Gabriel sidelong onto a broken pipe, shoving it part way through his chest between the armor plates of his vest. The anguish forced his arms close in. The vamp took advantage of the slip, digging its teeth into his shoulder, just missing his throat by inches. Gabriel bit back a cry of pain, pushing against the vamp with every bit of muscle, his teeth clenched tightly. Then the thing slumped against him.
He straightened in shock, shoving it away and pulling himself free of the pipe. Bewildered, he looked down at the rag doll at his feet. It had a large hole at the back of its neck, nearly lopping its head from its body. His eyes focused on the doorway, where a very proud of himself Bozant stood with his monstrous plasma gun over one shoulder, a thumb’s up toward Gabriel, and a wide, swaggering grin on his face. Gabriel didn't think he'd ever been so glad to see a human. He smiled, one hand over the wound in his side, and limped over to the doorway where the rest of the team took cover against the wall.
Well, I hope you enjoyed the Death and Dismemberment. I know it's a little on the long side, but at least you get three for the price of one.
If you'd like to see where I'm at just Google "Rimpac 2010" or USS Benfold Rimpac or anything along those lines. I'll attempt to get a blog post in tomorrow as well with some crazy pics of our missile shoots. We had a film crew onboard, and you'll never guess who I got to hang out with all day! And yes, I'm sorry, but I'm leaving you hanging. I'm waiting to get pics in the right format to post. Anyway, without further ado...
I've been waiting for this Blogfest forever. Seriously. I cannot wait to read the entries for this one. Thank you Tessa for hosting this fantastic Deathapalooza. Please visit the other Blogfesters' links on Tessa's site.
My entry is from my first MS, The Elder, a paranormal romance with some sci-fi. Gabriel is an alien who has a keen interest in the MC, Emma. She's been away at Dayspring, a neighboring settlement, which is now under heavy attack by another race of aliens, the Vamphyri. In this scene, he heard her scream so he knows she's nearby, but he hasn't found her yet before he encounters a few of his enemies.
Gabriel crouched low underneath one of the long, open tinted-glass windows, closing his eyes to sharpen his other senses. He detected her scent, light and floral, and strained to hear her voice. She remained silent, spiking his desperate need to find her. Was she unconscious, lying somewhere in there bleeding to death? The thick stench of death blotted out any chance of finding her by a blood trail, and her scent lingered all over the room. He assumed her office had to be in this building.
Creeping to a shattered doorway at the side of the building, he listened for the Vamphyri's movements. He counted three in the immediate room with no detectable human life and another squad of undetermined quantity on some level above them, still fighting judging by the gunshots.
Waiting patiently, he entered as one of them walked unwary across the doorway. One brutal pass of his black carbon blade severed the creature’s spine and gouged its airway. A faint gust from its throat alerted the two remaining Vamphyri. He dropped its body carelessly to the ground as they moved toward him.
Frenzied screeches raked at his sensitive ears as they leaped at him, their movements blurry with speed. Gabriel dodged to meet one of them midair, twisting to bring it to the ground. He knew he had to dispatch this one right away. The creatures weren't exactly known for fair fights, and they could overpower him together if he wasn't careful. Grappling with the thing's arms, he used his knee to pin it down at the hips. His claws were useless restrained as they were. Instead, he worked at flipping the Vamphyr to its belly to get a constriction hold on it without getting his throat ripped out by its clashing fangs.
To his advantage, the vamp had been shot a few times, enough to slow the healing process down, and in its weakened state, he turned it, sliding one arm over it's left shoulder and the other arm under his right. He rolled, his opponent still trapped but struggling in his grip, to counter the second vamp's clawed attack. Gabriel grunted in pain as the claws caught the side of his right forearm, slicing it wide open, before gouging deeply into the restrained vamp. It shrieked again, piercing into his ears painfully. He squeezed tight, then tighter, breaking the blood flow, still keeping its body between him and the second one. Just a little more. Within a few seconds, he burst the monster's heart.
He dropped it to the floor, knowing he would have time to remove its head before it rose again. As long as he could take out the last Vamphyr. It screamed its fury at him, its needle teeth and half of its face dripping blood and gore, white lips drawn back almost to its jaw bones. Gabriel wondered at how he could be in any way related to this thing, an empty shell, nothing inside save base instinct.
With their eyes like black orbs, it was near impossible to tell which way a Vamphyr would move, unlike humans who give their intentions away so easily. Gabriel watched for the minute muscle movements that would eventually give the thing away, but finally tired of waiting, he sprang forward head on, then ducked down and to the side as the vamp moved to meet him. It tumbled over his legs, but immediately rolled into a defensive squat. Surprised, Gabriel rose to face his opponent, absolutely the fastest damn vamp he'd ever encountered.
Given no other choice, he reluctantly went in for a direct brute strength approach. He hoped that he was the stronger one of the two. At this point, he didn't have the time to waste on strategy while more Vamphyri lurked above him and Emma hid who knows where in the building among them, alone, terrified, and defenseless. His urgency to find her lent him an energy and power he hadn't felt since before he'd ever met the humans.
Gabriel roared in fiery rage as the two seized each other's arms, both pushing to keep the claws and fangs away from their throats. Minutes passed as their bodies tossed and tumbled in their struggle. As they neared the wall, the Vamphyr pushed Gabriel sidelong onto a broken pipe, shoving it part way through his chest between the armor plates of his vest. The anguish forced his arms close in. The vamp took advantage of the slip, digging its teeth into his shoulder, just missing his throat by inches. Gabriel bit back a cry of pain, pushing against the vamp with every bit of muscle, his teeth clenched tightly. Then the thing slumped against him.
He straightened in shock, shoving it away and pulling himself free of the pipe. Bewildered, he looked down at the rag doll at his feet. It had a large hole at the back of its neck, nearly lopping its head from its body. His eyes focused on the doorway, where a very proud of himself Bozant stood with his monstrous plasma gun over one shoulder, a thumb’s up toward Gabriel, and a wide, swaggering grin on his face. Gabriel didn't think he'd ever been so glad to see a human. He smiled, one hand over the wound in his side, and limped over to the doorway where the rest of the team took cover against the wall.
Well, I hope you enjoyed the Death and Dismemberment. I know it's a little on the long side, but at least you get three for the price of one.
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